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r8 my poem
RAiLWAY | 
Sweden I_like_trains 
Continuing towards, frightening wars. I scream it out loud, I need some fire. It can't be right, this magnificent light. Even tho the ice is white. And I can't stand this sight. Even tho the time is up. And the sky it goes bright. The light keeps me warm, since the fallen time. And we go on together, and let's hope it stays forever. This night. This night. Our night. This night. And our life.
2019-03-09 17:25
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#1
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Canada ropzGOD 
cringe
2019-03-09 17:26
+1
2019-03-09 18:22
gay af
2019-03-09 17:28
#3
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Norway OfficialStrix 
poem bout nuclear warfare or sum? XD
2019-03-09 17:29
It's about a night you don't want to end.
2019-03-09 17:30
last part makes it bad
2019-03-09 17:29
#6
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Faroe Islands |imperator 
Come, let's watch the rain as it's falling down Sunlight on your skin when I'm not around Shit don't feel the same when you're out of town Oh-oh-oh, oh-oh, oh-oh So come, let's watch the rain as it's falling down Oh-oh-oh, oh-oh, oh-oh
2019-03-09 17:30
7/8
2019-03-09 17:31
#8
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Faroe Islands |imperator 
thank
2019-03-09 17:31
#9
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Norway OfficialStrix 
lmao, Falling Down - Lil Peep x XXXTentacion <3
2019-03-09 17:45
#19
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Faroe Islands |imperator 
idd!
2019-03-09 18:04
#10
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
Why did you just use "tho" for a poem? Why are you using meaningless words? Why don't you write something that truly reflects your inner self?
2019-03-09 17:49
#11
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Sweden NIP Fanboy #1 
10/10
2019-03-09 17:50
I write lyrics for a long time and unless it has some beautiful melody I can't think of right now, it's very primitive and not very wealthy. 3.2 / 10.
2019-03-09 17:50
#14
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
ye men)) he just used tho for a poem what the fuck it also has no structure, no meaning behind the poem even i can do better than that))
2019-03-09 17:52
I believe that. Sad you can see "tho" a lot more often than an actually beautiful "although". And yes, the poem is poor but he tried, a good try but no.
2019-03-09 18:02
#20
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
He tried, indeed, and I truly believe he actually put effort into the poem, but using "tho" is just straight outrageous. There are many beautiful expressions to use... even the full word, as you've mentioned. Perhaps is just the poems/songs he's read/listened to. They usually are full of slangs... so could be. A few days ago I wrote a poem, one that I particularly liked writing ( however, I think the result was poor ). I don't think I used "though" once in that one.
2019-03-09 18:14
I know this kind. I came across some indie rock gems and progressive styles, they all have had those simple, almost primitive lyrics without some unique melody nor those that would make sense. Just a brief visit on some personal encounter. The lowest of all. You can show me your little poem. I like writing too, but I write lyrics, not just poems anymore.
2019-03-09 18:21
#24
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
I like Pantera for some reason. Most of their lyrics are primitive, senseless and usually dumb, but some have very deep meanings and the instruments go along perfectly. I think their pinnacle was Vulgar Display Of Power when it comes to deep lyrics, but I also love bits from the rest of their albums. Sure, here's my poem: The Fledgling Time begins sometime shortly before it might end. Just the simple curse We must carry on our own. In these new beginnings our judgement is clouded, Far from perfection itself. By the time Thargelion comes it will have left me again. Reborn to newer thoughts and mysteries yet to be solved. The fall, long and dark we know it might never end. Consuming and corrupting all our veins have bled. In the end, we never don't judge we simply let time begin again and haunt our fragile minds. Once living through me the wrath of a man now long gone, long lost, broken and thrown into the river. This bold contradiction of mine. For whom was it a waste of time? A man, yet to create a God? Time, more precious than gold. Priceless, outliving the old. Make the most out of it today, never tomorrow. Now, that I lie dormant on this bed of times the universe stands still As my conscience drifts off. All my past, together united shaped the man that has become. The creation of the universe and now, a sleepless individual.
2019-03-09 18:42
I like blues and soul, those are brothers in arms regarding lyrics. Excellent poem, this is exactly a poem, I think this could be sung with enough struggle and it's not for an amateur listener. Only a word lovers will appreciate, senses are all well hid and the truth is not kept afloat. But is beautiful, indeed, good buddy!
2019-03-09 18:47
#27
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
Many thanks. It's the poem that has taken me the longest to write, so I guess it paid off. Your words mean a lot to me, kind stranger! I'll keep writing them as long as I have the inspiration to do it. Cheers!
2019-03-09 18:58
How long did it take? I try to hurry every time an inspiration gets to me! I usually write within 20-30 minutes, sometimes less. If we wallow in the mire for far too long, it might lose the meaning we got in the start. Have fun chap!
2019-03-10 02:26
#31
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
Well, most of my poems take between 5-10 minutes to write. That one took about 15 minutes or so, maybe a bit more. And I'm similar to you! Whenever I get the inspiration I just try and write down whatever comes to my mind asap ahaha.
2019-03-10 02:45
Creative minds are similar to each other I heard!
2019-03-10 17:15
#34
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
true true :p I've heard the same thing..
2019-03-10 19:38
Fantooosticc poetry man I loved it!
2019-03-10 19:42
#44
steel | 
Spain Zhalos 
Did you really? And anyway, thanks for your kind words! ^~^
2019-03-10 19:52
#13
KRIMZ | 
Denmark slacking 
expected from sweden
2019-03-09 17:51
#15
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France TheIntelloBox 
EZ4 Ence, putted underbelt.
2019-03-09 17:54
#33
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Finland EsaasE 
upperbelt*
2019-03-10 17:17
poems in 2019 HAHAAHAHAHA
2019-03-09 17:55
Algerian using HLTV hahahahahahhahahaha
2019-03-10 19:42
still triggered because of 2010 ? hahahaha gtfo and go build a pyramide
2019-03-10 22:36
xaxaxaxaxaxaxax Who's speaking? who doesn't even know to spell pyramid bad try Actually you are shit of a person and a failure in life Go try somewhere else nygaard
2019-03-10 22:46
why do i need to know how to pronounce a shit word? nobody gives a fuck about ur country mate not with ur shit economy not with ur subhuman population and pretty much not with every else mr terrorist triggered because of a football match hahaha virgin boy
2019-03-10 22:53
xaxaxaxaxaxaxa I am Indian you libtardio rain's surname sounding man nice to join a forum of gaming and speak ill of other nations!
2019-03-10 22:54
indian? thats actaully worse rofl
2019-03-11 00:10
it's nice
2019-03-09 17:55
4Gay
2019-03-09 18:26
i think you have the gay
2019-03-09 18:43
Lul
2019-03-10 19:43
#28
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Germany Bennime 
Your mothertrucking gaylord. lmao
2019-03-09 19:10
#29
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Germany felixlulz 
be gay somewhere else ...
2019-03-09 19:12
trash cringe and ice is not white /close
2019-03-10 19:40
Doesn't even rhyme 3/8
2019-03-10 19:43
your poem is extara cringe so now r8 my poem. All world is sick you suck my dick it's very big, goodbye small pig.
2019-03-10 19:46
he have gay disease
2019-03-10 19:49
#43
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United Kingdom KieranFR 
These comments are exactly what I expected to see.
2019-03-10 19:51
#45
woxic | 
Turkey Brkyb 
I can not say it's good or bad ,but keep going man.You can improve yourself.
2019-03-10 19:56
#46
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Israel OKOptimistic1 
trash
2019-03-10 19:58
#49
Twistzz | 
Lithuania Sheikl 
Most supportive community ever.
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