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I feel like a social outcast
BRO DONT INCLUDE UR REAL NAME UNTIL U STOP GIVING US PERMISSION TO VIEW IT
Are you going to read this out loud, or will somebody read it?
sceptical is spelled with a k- skeptical in third paragraph." In realities of our time people are mixed both culturally and racially, and the need to break the stereotypes and establish new rules of society is on its biggest peak. "
kind of a run on sentence and could be reworded differently. Overall very nicely written and positive message.
"were exposed to psychological pressure. From the personal perspective, I believe the reason of majority’s desperate hate on minority lies and begins in the family circle."
This sentence doesn't feel right to me..
- From my perspective, the reason for pressure on the minority stems from family circles.
The writing is good and it's also good you have other people proofread it. It's good that you don't make it feel like an essay either, but more personal and about yourself. I think something's to work on is just trying to use as little words as possible to explain stuff, getting rid of useless words, trying to phrase it in a simple way. Most of the time, it's easier for the reader to read and understand your point faster that way, there's less of a margin for error where the reader can get confused.