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I wrote a song and want to have second chorus and the last verse of it in French, if you're willing to try to help me to convert it from English to French, I'll show you the lyrics, either here in a reply or PM.
But beware, it's not just a translation, it's a lyrical text and you're limited for the same amount of vowels as well as rhyming of each line. It's not easy but possible if you know both English and French.
I'll give you a credit for the song as a French piece writer when it's out but I can't say when it will be.
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Do you have any experience of writing? Translating? Whatever?
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"As Moon lights the sky and all of the land I get dreamy again
But all that I think of this lonely night is to just hold your hand
Wink your eyes once, and, I'll... understand
There is a chance for me to be your man"
The verse.
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It's not easy man ))
gl to my fellow french man)
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Told you ma friend! But I'd really like that to happen, French is sublime and such a fit for the ballads, exactly like one I wrote.
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What's cringe about it if I may ask?
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Well, thanks for explanation, it seems very strange to me.
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Are there really the same amount of vowels? Could I ask you for the vocalise on this? No need to sing, just read it so I get to know how to pronounce it and later sing.
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vocaroo.com - try there!
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voca.ro/1mRsmRfi4flk
Here u go, i've got shit voice ;(
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Thank you very much! Beautiful tone of your voice, very clear. I'll write to you via PM to ask for your name if this is the version that will stay, I'm just bugged over that misconduct of the last line, other than that, everything is okay!
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Wouldn't you like it? Just to be accredited for something you've done? I'm not saying that it will receive much attention but still nice to know.
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Yes, the English lyrics are already written! But here's the chorus that I'd like to have converted too!
Here it is:
Tell me, oh, tell me
When will you appear
With all of your presents and body appeal
Sing it or whisper to me in my ear
"Darlin' I love you, I'll always be near!"
A bit sleazy but the melody is warm.
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I think there's a bit too many vowels in the second line, isn't it? And is there a way to keep the rhyme for the last line? It doesn't have to be the exact same words, you can play with it!
I translated it just to see the actual beauty in this and I must say you've got all it takes, if you aren't a writer already, you can become one. Very beautiful, sir!
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Pretty good actually
Are you trying to get a french girl or what ?
My take on it :
Alors que la lune illumine le ciel et la terre, je redeviens rêveur (songeur ?). Tout ce à quoi je pense en cette nuit solitaire, c’est de te tenir la main. Cligne une fois des yeux, je comprendrais. Il y a une chance pour moi d’être ton compagnon.
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Thanks for your version, I wish we kept the rhyme for it because it's really essential but I'm thankful anyway.
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IT's hard to keep the sense and the rythm... Best is clearly #40
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My gratitude to you either way! French language is beautiful beyond description.
Not easy tbh, going from English to French is really hard, especially for rhymes. I give it a try for fun:
"Alors que la Lune éclaire le ciel, la terre, je redeviens rêveur,
Mais ce à quoi je pense pendant cette nuit solitaire est conquérir ton cœur,
Un seul clin d'œil et j'aurais compris,
Qu'il y a une chance pour moi d'être ton mari."
I had to change a little bit of the sense for rhymes so here are the lyrics retranslated in english:
"As Moon lights the sky and all of the land I get dreamy again
But all that I think of this lonely night is conquer your heart
Only one wink and I would have... understand
There is a chance for me to be your man"
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Sounds very good and looks too! May I ask you to vocalise it? (vocaroo.com)
No need to sing it, just read it and I'll get to know how it sounds.
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Don't say so! I'm sure your voice is sweet, I'm yet to meet a Frenchman with a bad voice! But anyway, I'll write to you via PM to ask for your name if this is the version that cuts it!
You could see about doing a chorus if you will, #48. You did great on this one.
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That's even harder lmao (btw aren't you Jovik? I recognize the speech and I think we already discussed on instrumental songs). Struggled with the middle line tho
"Dis moi, oh dis moi,
Quand tu te montreras
Avec tous tes cadeaux, tes jolies formes,
Puisses tu me le chanter, le murmurer
"Chéri je t'aime, je serai toujours à tes côtés""
Tell me, oh, tell me
When will you appear
With all your presents, your beautiful curves,
Could you sing it to me, whisper it,
"Darlin' I love you, I'll always be near!"
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Woah it's very good! You took care of the rhyme, it lays on the melody so nicely! Much thanks to the other guys whose version I adore as well, but I'm keeping yours!
Oh and yes, I'm Jovik, I remember you too, not very well, but we definitely met before!
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